When No One’s Looking

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When No One’s Looking

Post by DarkMask on Sun Oct 22, 2017 10:01 pm

I started working on a new story that combines some elements from story ideas I had in the past, I've finished Chapter 1 and once I get Chapter 2 done I'm going to look for an editor and get it submitted on Lit.

Here's Chapter 1, let me know what you think.


Title: When No One’s Looking
Description: Mom doesn’t like the new young neighbors.

It was a complete accident, a perfect combination of timing, luck and sheer stupidity that lead me down this path of obsession and corruption. Never in a million years would I ever consider this scenario but as they say, sometimes truth is stranger than fiction.

It was summer which was in my opinion the absolute best time of the year and not because of the weather, personally I hated how hot it could get but I tolerated it because summer brought with it a great git, bikini season. Being a 19-year-old guy, you can’t blame me for being excited about seeing hot girls in bikinis, even in this age of the internet where porn was a click away there was just something about seeing an attractive woman in a skimpy bikini in real life. I was fortunate enough that we only lived about an hour or so from a local beach and had already made plans with my friends to go later this week to officially kick off our summer.

I decided it was time to stop being lazy and get on with my day, I took a shower and headed downstairs when I heard what had become an all too familiar conversation in the Bennett household.

“Again Darrel, this is what, the forth party in a month? This is getting fucking ridiculous!” Mom said.

“I know honey, I’ll talk with them again but I think you’re over-reacting. They’re just kids” Dad said.

I was coming down the stairs when I first heard them and arrived in the kitchen when dad said the above, I knew right away he had messed up but the real question was, did he? You could hear the anger and frustration in her voice as she talked with my father. Yet that didn’t stop him for accusing her of overreacting.

“Damnit Darrel, you’re not their friend! You’re a husband with a two-month old baby, start fucking thinking about something other being cool and friendly with those assholes!” Mom yelled.

Mom got up from the kitchen table and walked right past me heading upstairs to check on Kayla. I walked into the kitchen and made a bowl of cereal while did poured himself another cup of coffee.

“Another fun morning, I see.” I said to my father.

“Hah, you just heard the end of it, I had to talk her down from calling the police.” Dad said.

“Wow, it’s getting that bad? Maybe Mom has a point then?” I said.

“She’s overreacting Bryan, it’s a combination of lack of sleep and changing hormones. It really wasn’t even that loud last night but you know how it is” Dad calmly said while drinking his coffee.

“Then why was she so upset?” I said.

Dad put down his coffee.

“I guess there was a group of them in their backyard playing some kind of drinking games and it got too loud for her liking.” Dad said while rubbing his temple.

“Then let’s do it Dad, I’ll switch rooms so when you or mom is checking on the baby or Mom has to feed her, she won’t have to deal with it.” I said.

Truth be told, I was also getting annoyed with the neighbors, not because they liked to party but because I was getting sick of hearing about them multiple times a week from my mother.

“No! We’re not going to do that!”

Mom had come downstairs.

I turned around to respond to her and was shocked to see her openly breastfeeding Kayla. My eyes were drawn to my mom’s exposed breast and while I tried to look away, I simply could not. This didn’t go unnoticed by my mom.

“Bryan it’s not a big deal, I breastfed you when you were a baby, though it was easier as my boobs weren’t as big as they are now.” Mom said.

“Ah thanks for the unwanted info Mom!” I said while turning around to face my father again. As I did I saw a slight grin on his face from Mom’s comment. I’m sure he didn’t mind her having bigger boobs.

Mom stood behind me continuing to breastfeed Kayla while we continued our conversation. In the end it was decided that I wouldn’t switch rooms as Mom made it clear there would be no compromises made because of our asshole neighbors, as mom put it. Now I’m no stranger to swearing but it still came as a surprise every time Mom swore as up until recently, I could not remember the last time she cussed. In fact, she used to wash my mouth out with soap when I was younger to teach me a lesson.

Now you’re probably already guessed what caused this changed in my mom’s behavior besides the Baby, our neighbors.
The old Miller’s house has been vacant for nearly a year when they moved to Florida to be with family. The Millers were great people so I knew the layout of their house and it wasn’t bad, it was a two-story house like ours and was in great condition. But the best part about it was the pool. They were one of a few houses on the block that had a pool and I always loved their pool parties because, you guessed it, hot women in bikinis. So, you can imagine how sad I was when they moved and we lost access to their pool. The Miller’s allowed us full access to their pool so on really hot days I would simply hop the fence, swim for a bit and then relax in the pool house.

The pool house wasn’t that big but it did have an N-shaped couch and a window on the back side opposite the door letting in some light if you didn’t want to turn on the lights. It also had AC which was amazing if you just wanted to hang out and relax after swimming. It’s also where I lost my virginity to a neighbor girl right before the Millers had moved. So yeah that pool house was special to me.

I was thrilled when I found out the house had been sold, new neighbors meant access to the pool and by extension the pool house once again! Now if you thought I was excited about simply having new neighbors, then I was over the moon when I found out our new neighbors were college guys a couple years older than me. Dean and Derrick or the “Double-D’s” as they were jokingly referred to sometimes by their friends had just finished school and decided to rent a house. They were not bad looking guys at all which meant they probably knew some hot girls.

Mom wasn’t too keen on going over to meet the neighbors as she was pregnant and according to her, looked like crap so Dad and I went over. We ended up helping them move in and become friendly with them, Dad really took a liking to them and I would see him talking with them a lot either in passing or stopping by with beers. I get it, he needed an escape from Mom and I guess the new neighbors did it for him.

Me on the other hand, I didn’t particularly care for them and really just wanted to get invited to any particular parties they might have. It never happened though which pissed me off but was pissed me off even more was they invited Dad to just about everyone one. The strange thing was they also invited Mom, who was pregnant and a month or so away from giving birth.

I found this all out one day when I came home a little early and heard Dad and Mom talking about it. This was the first party they were having so Mom didn’t hate them just yet.

“Sorry Darrel, if you want to go mingle with the neighbors and leave your pregnant Wife at home then go, have fun at your college party!”. Mom said angrily.

“Honey, they invited us both, they’re just trying to be friendly. C’mon, it will be fun” Dad pleaded.

“No Darrel, we hardly know them.”

“You hardly know them, you go out of your way to avoid them!” Dad said cutting of mom.

“No Darrel, I just don’t go out of my way like you to hang out with them! Besides I did go over and socialize with you one time and I told you I didn’t like how they were acting.” Mom said.

“Jesus honey, that’s how younger kids are, Bryan probably acts like that!” Dad said.

“Oh, I doubt it, Bryan has manners and respect. Are you seriously trying to tell me Bryan would openly flirt and hit on someone’s wife? Let alone in front of their husband?” Mom said.

I was taken back, Dean and Derrick were flirting and hitting on my Mom, in front of Dad and he did nothing?

“Honey, I’m not the jealous type, you know that. I’ve been with you for 20 years and I’m used to guys making comments about your looks, you’ve always been very attractive and it didn’t bother you before, so why now? Dad said?

He had a good point, I’d be lying if I said my mother was not attractive. I have dealt with how beautiful my Mom is since middle-school when I started going through puberty and noticing Women. I watched neighbors and random strangers flirt with her and heard more than my fair share of comments from my friends about her. I remember one time when my mom was chaperoning one of the school dances, she must have been asked by just about every senior there if she would dance with them. I was embarrassed of course but surprisingly not angry, something inside of me liked watching and knowing these guys wanted my mom but could not have her. I guess you could say this event is what really started it all, though I didn’t know it at the time.
Mom and Dad continued to argue about going to the party and it ended up with Dad going alone. Having no idea what Dean and Derrick said to my Mom I was unable to judge if it was any more intense then what I had heard before.

I snapped out of my memory daze.

“Kayla’s done so I’m putting her back in her crib.” Mom sad while heading back upstairs.

“What’s on the docket for today Bryan?” Dad said.

“Might be hanging with some friends, maybe see a movie, I dunno.” I said.

“Sounds fun, enjoy your youth while you can. Your Mom is bringing Kayla over to her parents and spending the night so it will just be me when you get home.” Dad said.

I’m sure Mom could definitely use the break and spending time with Grandma and Grandpa would give her just that. I got up from my chair and headed back upstairs, our staircase was like a sideways U with my parent’s room on the immediate right when at the top and a hallway that ran parallel to the staircase. The first door in the hallway was my sisters room, the same room that overlooked our neighbor’s backyard, the next door was the bathroom and finally the last door was my room.

I took a showered, got dressed and made some plans. As I walking down the hallway I noticed Kaya’s door was open and Mom was in her room, Kayla was in her crib and Mom was just starting out the window.

“I don’t think any amount of staring will fix the situation Mom.” I said with a laugh.

“What? Oh, Bryan you scared me and keep your voice down!” Mom said quietly

I had startled her it seems.

“Haha sorry, still getting used to having a baby in the house. Just wanted to let you know I’m going to hang out with my friends so I won’t see you until you get back from Grandpa and Grandma’s. Enjoy your mini-vacation.“ I said quietly.

“Real funny, come give me a hug.” Mom said quietly.

I slowly made my way into the room and gave my mom a hug. My Mom had always been a hugger, something my friends absolutely loved and made sure they got when they came to visit. However, with her breastfeeding she had stopped giving hugs as her boobs had become sore so this was the first time she had hugged me in a while.

“A hug, aren’t you, you know, sore in the uh, chest region?

I refrained myself from saying boobs.

“Yes but I want to hug my big baby since I won’t be seeing him for a couple of days” Mom said.

Big baby was my new nickname ever since Kayla was born. I didn’t like it but Mom did and I knew how near impossible it was to change her mind on something. Which was one of the reasons Dad had so much trouble with her regarding the neighbors.

I gave my mom and hug and could not help but noticing her big boobs squashing into my chest. My mom has always had big boobs but they felt even bigger now. My body didn’t care that this was my Mom, all it knew was that an attractive woman with big boobs was pressing her body into mine. I ended the hug with mom, since I was taller than mom I had been looking down and when I brought my head back up I was able to see out the window.
I could see both Derrick and Dean in their backyard doing yardwork in their swim shorts. I found it weird that this was what mom had been looking at before I came in. They were in good shape, you could tell from here. Was Mom checking them out before I interrupted her? Young guys and a middle-aged woman is an all too common story but this was my Mom we were talking about. Just this morning she was spitting nothing but vile and hate for these two. Nah, I was wrong, Mom hated these two and I was just letting my imagination run wild.

“See ya in a couple days Mom!” I said.

“Love you sweetie” she said back.

I went down the stairs a bit and just stopped, I don’t know why but I had to be sure. So, I waited a couple minutes and turned around and boy did I feel like an idiot. Mom was cradling Kayla and talking to her. Realizing I was being an idiot I proceeded down the stairs, out the front door and prepared to meet up with my friends.


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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by Patera_Silk on Mon Oct 23, 2017 8:51 am

It shows promise, please continue... alien

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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by Zohan on Mon Oct 23, 2017 12:59 pm

You have a wonderful scene set out. I would love to read this series.

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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by Guest on Mon Oct 23, 2017 9:07 pm

Really great start to this one. Hope you see it through


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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by DarkMask on Mon Oct 23, 2017 11:03 pm

I'm going to do a bit of work on Chapter 1 and then start on Chapter 2. As usual don't be surprised if you don't see Chapter 2 for awhile, I write in bursts and sometimes don't come back to a story for a while.


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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by draymorton on Tue Oct 24, 2017 12:12 pm

Awesome! Definitely continue - can't wait to see where this goes!

Quick note: you may want to consider changing the father's name, as "Darrel" is similar to Derrick and readers might get confused.


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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by Jman1012 on Tue Oct 24, 2017 7:38 pm

Great start looking forward to the rest.


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Re: When No One’s Looking

Post by DarkMask on Tue Oct 24, 2017 10:17 pm

Good point @draymorton, I'll change his name.


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