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Post by mathew elizabeth on Sun Jan 01, 2017 1:53 am

Hey everyone. Happy New Year!

I've finally posted Chapter 13 on my ASSTR. Once again it didn't cover as much as I wanted. But I have so much idea's still brimming in my head that Chapter 14 will out be real soon. Because 14 will be really like chapter 13b in terms of what I wanted to get out in the first place.

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Post by forever316 on Sun Jan 01, 2017 8:32 pm

That was awesome, Happy New Year Matt. I really see what you mean that it will eventually lead to his demise. I can't wait until we get to the bullying again. It was awesome. I really love how his mom ultimately already made her choice between the two and she chose Ryan. She is purposely making him think that he is crazy just so she and Ryan can continue being a couple. I even love the fact that the psychiatrist, the one person who is supposed to be helping him is in actuality hoping that all the abuse is real and not only wants to encourage it, but actually join in on the fun. Your story is getting so good.

I can't wait for Chapter 14. I'm really glad you said its coming out soon. It makes me happy.

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Post by Philo B. on Tue Jan 03, 2017 12:05 am

I really like the way you breathed new life into this story.  After Ryan's admission to Scott's mom about the "Fart Monster" drawing, I was wondering how the tension would be rebuilt.  However, during his stay in the mental facility, it seems that Scott experienced a sort of mental recalibration of his expectations from his relationship with his mother.  Basically, Scott has made peace with the fact that Ryan is Numero Uno, so he is seeking only a modicum of affection from her.  When this is denied in increasingly cruel ways, I can only imagine the anguish, torture, as well as arousal, that will assail Scott's vulnerable psyche.  This is true netorare.  Great work!
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Post by Betrayal on Tue Jan 03, 2017 2:35 pm

Excellent work as always,Mat. Smile

With how it's going I'm guessing that Ms. Bunda is going to "cuck" Scott as well.Twisted Evil  That's great but I think we need more of a backstory of why she so quickly turned cruel towards Scott and wants Ryan as well. It kind of came out of nowhere in this chapter which is fine but maybe it can be expounded on a bit.  Maybe it's too late to make her a mom too but what if she has a beta son like Scott who gets bullied and used by his friends too. Perhaps she'd like to fuck them but feels guilty about doing that to her own son so she instead uses Scott and Ryan as substitutes for her own perverse netorare fantasies.

Also more on Scott's own sexual feelings towards her so when Ryan does actually steal her away too it's all the more distressing and powerful. Maybe a flashback to him jerking off to her back in the mental ward and then having a nightmare of Ms bunda rejecting him for Ryan instead. I really liked it in the earlier chapters when you had Ryan and Penny slowing walking out of Scott's reach until they completely deserted him and did what they wanted too. Maybe you can work that kind of scenario in here too.

Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Post by mathew elizabeth on Tue Jan 03, 2017 9:56 pm

Thanks for all your comments and idea's. I'm looking to add more of a backstory for 'Michelle Bunda' in the following chapter. I believe she will have a tough Latino gangster boyfriend who is into organised crime and drug dealing. I've started to watch 'The Wire' and I'm seeing how this type of life fucks people up. Scott may be forced to run errands and be threatened with violence if he fails but these idea's are underdeveloped and may only short plot arc or simmer into nothing. But my creative juices are flowing with it. I've been also thinking of opening the chapter to Scott's mental breakdown when he actually catches his mother and Ryan having sex before he is sent away. That sequence will be complicated to write as I need to balance while mixing up his perverted cuckold fantasies and it developing into a nervous breakdown. It will be how the scene is done. Thankyou for your kind words 'Low IQ Latina Sluts', Forever316 and Philo B.

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Post by mathew elizabeth on Mon Feb 27, 2017 8:49 pm

Okay everyone. Here is chapter 14. The shortest chapter ever. It hasn't even scratched the surface of what I originally planned to compile into the "original beta chapter 13". But I believe it covers great ground and sets up these new situations for newcomers and series 'vet's' alike. I intended to write so much more but once again got busy. I'm thinking of writing things in smaller shorter bursts to satisfy myself and readers.

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Post by Betrayal on Tue Feb 28, 2017 2:22 pm

Wow for such a short chapter it really changes the entire storyline, not necessarily in a bad way. It seems like a soft reset in that Scott is now back to square one but must now share his home with his mom and her lover in a bizarre love triangle. I definitely like the way this is going as there will no doubt be more opportunities for scott to face humiliation and rejection as he serves as a cuck footstool for those two.

Not to spoil anything but how cruel do you exactly plan on making Penny and Ryan and what options will Scott have now since no one seems interested in helping or believing him?
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Post by nemo on Thu Mar 02, 2017 12:39 pm

Mathew Elizabeth, thank you for Mommy's Love Denied! I'm delighted that Michelle Bunda is now the school shrink at Scott's school, since she can now ensure that all official reports on incidents involving Scott clearly confirm that nothing happened. Ryan did not have an affair with Penny, and nobody ever bullied Scott. All of these events were Scott's fantasies.

At the same time, Michelle can instruct everybody at the school that Scott's fantasies of being bullied are actually good for his mental health, and all the students and teachers should feel free to encourage (by whatever means they like) the bullying fantasies. All Michelle's official reports will continue to say that nothing actually happened.

It might also be fun if Michelle and Penny have an affair. And of course Penny and Ryan will continue to make Scott's life at home miserable.

Please keep up the good work!

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Post by Philo B. on Fri Mar 03, 2017 12:07 am

This chapter may have been short, but it was tantalizing. I agree with Betrayal about the soft reset, though Scott is clearly still very much in love with his mother. Despite his tentative acceptance of the living arrangements, I imagine he will find them difficult to accept as his emotional investment returns to its pre-mental hospital levels. It'll be like being wounded, healing up, and then wounded in the same place. So much potential there. Well done indeed.
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Post by mathew elizabeth on Sat Mar 04, 2017 4:17 pm

Thanks everyone for your input. I'm glad you all noticed the soft-reset. Basically I'm at the stage in the story now where I can 'truly get started'; in a word; when it comes to the more open and cruel sort of NTR. I've put great effort in the dozen or so chapters of set-up; so there can at least be some sort of realistic context behind reasoning of this 'tantalizing' sexual set up.

This is what I set out to do from the very start; make this story as scarring as possible; and evidently; the only way I could do that was through developing my characters motivations through a set amount of origin chapters. As the plot developed during the course of the first thirteen chapters; I made it into the protagonists Scott's fault because of his twisted fetishes and fantasies. I made Ryan into a more realistic character who is caught up in this intense situation of 'mother-son love' games with his friends mother; because he is dealing with his own issues of never being brought up with a mother and just an abusive alcoholic father. I make Penny out feel like a neglected woman; although rather clueless and selfish; who had issues of bouncing between popularity levels in school; I still need to develop her motivations further. Ill introduce Scott's long lost father eventually; maybe?

Anyway I'm glad you all like where it's going. I'm thinking of introducing idea's through Miss Bunda. I'm considering introducing a alternate version of 'holding attachment therapy' and inflicting it onto Scott throughout the story. Now this thing called 'holding attachment therapy' in real life is quite honestly 'abuse'. I don't condone it IN REAL LIFE one bit and I think it should be made criminal. Basically it involves an adopted child being held down or STANDING UP by the psychologist or parent as they yells in the subjects ear with threats of abandonment among other things.

I was thinking of Miss Bunda implementing this eventually on Scott in the school office. Despite not being adopted; it is felt he is detached from his family because of his strange perverted ways. So in the office I imagine Miss Bunda, Penny and Ryan mocking and yelling in his ear while he is held in place forced to listen by two strong guards. Eventually losing it and crying as he his held there listening to all the voices bounce around his head at once.

Maybe Penny and Ryan act out an abandonment scene while Scott is held in place by the muscle men. She kisses Ryan on the lips in front of Scott while they glare happily in his eyes (a lot like the end of 'The Last American Virgin') and they both slowly walk out the door with haunting 'goodbyes' with content giggles coming spookily from their breath as they disappear from his sight out of the office (Maybe with sad romantic music played on a small radio on Miss Bunda's desk? LOL). Almost like Penny and Ryan are re-enacting the future! Foreshadowing! (hehe! Laughs evilly). Scott knows he will be returning home and has to act like nothing happened in the office. Not sure when Ill put this idea on the page. But I'm imagining it and it seems so haunting I have to write it.

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Post by nemo on Sun Mar 05, 2017 7:50 pm

This has been a great story from the beginning. I liked the beginning because Penny was so receptive to Ryan, and he was able to turn her against her son so easily.

But now I'm falling in love with Miss Bunda. Her professional responsibility is to help Scott, but really she just wants to hurt him and hurt him and hurt him some more. Obviously Penny and Ryan are happy to help her do just that. But since she is now a figure in authority at Scott's school, she can encourage and protect Scott's bullies while concealing what they are doing, and claim that it's all in service to Scott's well-being.

Please do write the simulated abandonment scene! Would you consider having a younger student, who was smaller than Scott but due to extensive athletic training much stronger, be one of the guards? Possibly a female.

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Post by nemo on Tue Mar 14, 2017 8:50 am

Wow, I didn't mean to kill this thread off! Mathew Elizabeth, this is a great story and I hope you write some more of it soon! I hope you will forgive me for mentioning a few more ideas:

Ryan confesses to Penny that he poisoned his father's liquor so he would be put in Penny's custody. Penny is delighted.

Ryan's father dies and Penny legally adopts Ryan.

Penny writes a will making Ryan her primary beneficiary. Since Scott would have grounds for contesting the will if he is cut out entirely, Penny plans to leave him a minimal amount of money. But Ryan convinces Penny that Scott would never have the balls to contest her will even if he is completely cut out. Penny is aroused by the idea of cutting Scott out completely and decides to do it.

Since everyone assumes that Ryan's father died from excessive drinking, no one suspects Ryan of poisoning him, and he inherits his father's entire estate. It's a considerable estate.

Thanks again for this great story!

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Post by nemo on Fri Mar 31, 2017 9:21 pm

Mathew Elizabeth, do you have any news for us? I hope you consider my comments to be constructive, but feel free to tell me to shut up if you don't. An image popped into my brain recently of Miss Bunda anally raping Scott with a strap-on; could that be worked into the story?

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Post by mathew elizabeth on Sat Apr 01, 2017 7:00 pm

Hey Nemo. No official news yet sorry. I have a number of idea's swirling through my mind and I have a solid idea on what direction the story will be taking. Your ideas are appreciated. Ill try to get another chapter out before mid April. Ill tell you some ideas I have in the mean time.

*Miss Bunda has a meeting with Scott and Penny. Quite a bit of dialogue. Penny complains about Scott's excessive masturbation. Miss Bunda said that Scott is challenged to masturbate no more than once a week; "everything in moderation". It will be up to Penny and Ryan to keep tabs on it; and catch him out; if he is being a naughty 'wanking' pervert. Both mother and her young lover would storm into Scott's room at random times; sometimes and sometimes not catching him in the act. The one time he is allowed to masturbate per week; he must ask permission; and since the toilet is a sneaky place to do it; he must always ask permission to use the toilet too. Ryan is very eager to help keep Scott in check for Penny; putting on a serious, moralistic attitude as opposed to his usual snarky past self.

*Midway through this drama- Ryan talks with Scott alone in his room; we are then flashed back to the moment Scott sees Ryan and Penny making love. Remembering this through the conversation; there will be very cruel but conclusive and foreshadowing words spoken from Ryan to Scott. Both finally openly acknowledging to each other that they were taking part in powerful sadomasochistic experience; where Ryan will always be the victor; and Scott will moan and groan in humiliating pleasure as he loses over and over again.

*Ryan is actually the character that has had the most development. Throughout the story I have made him less antagonistic. Through the first ten or eleven- ill call- prologue chapters. Scott seemed to be the most relatable in terms of point of view when it came to his downfall in the story. Ryan was merely a ditch in the road for him in his progression in life.
But it's like I'm almost doing a swap around now where Ryan is becoming the outer protagonist; while Scott is morphing into a twisted antagonist that Ryan must overcome in this amazing sexualised experience he is having with his friends mother; it's about Ryan making this incredible situation his as he develops into a man; trying to keep his normality intact; because this situation isn't normal.
Ryan will also experience similar cuckold fantasies as Scott; looking at Scott's porn on Scott's computer and actually getting off over the 'large black cocks' penetrating the women. It may seem a little homoerotic; but it's not; Ryan's fascination with other males competitive larger genitalia fuels his need to better himself as he learns to be a 'normal man' during his development through puberty. Ryan will psychologically conquer these things. While Scott will fall deeper and deeper into the abyss.

Hope you like the idea's. Would love to discuss more.

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Post by nemo on Sun Apr 02, 2017 1:33 pm

Thank you for the preview! I'm very much in favor of Ryan always defeating Scott. Also, it's good whenever Penny and Miss Bunda rejoice in Ryan's triumphs and encourage him to do more.

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Post by mathew elizabeth on Thu May 04, 2017 3:57 am

Hey everyone. Chapter 15 is posted on my ASSTR. Check it out and let me know what you think. Smile

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Post by nemo on Thu May 04, 2017 3:03 pm

Thanks! I'm guessing that even though Scott believes Penny is unaware that he is buying her video clips, actually she does know and thinks it's funny that he's spending his hard-earned money on her.

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Post by mathew elizabeth on Fri May 05, 2017 9:04 pm

The following chapter will fill in a lot of the gaps on how these last couple of months came to be. It will be a lot of exposition through flashbacks centred around the mind-fuck from the clip that takes place present time. I haven't decided wether Scott's mom knows already or she will in the near future. This plot may be the breaking point where Ryan convinces Penny to hate Scott because her own flash and blood are buying those clips.

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Post by Betrayal on Mon May 08, 2017 6:38 pm

Hey Matt do you actually plan on Penny and Ryan having sex while Scott is in the house aware of it, or will everything be done kind of behind his back?
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Post by mathew elizabeth on Mon May 08, 2017 8:42 pm

I'm going to have them do stuff behind his back at first. But then later on in the story it will grow into them doing it outright in front of him. But then again; that might be too good for Scott. After they gradually get annoyed that Scott likes them doing that stuff in front of him; they might tell him to stop starring at them; "Stop starring at us!" "Stop looking at us!" etc. So I might even take it a step further and make him conditioned to go out of sight and masturbate on the toilet so he can only hear; and only with permission of course.

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Post by Philo B. on Wed May 10, 2017 10:20 pm

Great work, mathew elizabeth! Business is really picking up with Ryan's continuing corruption of Scott's mom, who is hastily shedding what little inhibitions she has left. Can't wait to see where this goes.
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Post by Yfi on Sat Jun 03, 2017 2:28 pm

Whelp, after five "sessions", I was able to marathon all fifteen chapters of this story that are currently released. And wow, what a trip.

The way the story is organized, jumping between characters, as well as forwards/backwards through time, is so unorthodox and yet works wonderfully. Seeing Scott twist into a demented masturbation freak as his mind gets warped is both exciting and horrifying. The way he doubts himself and his predicament, it gets quite disturbing sometimes (in a weird, good way). Penny and Ryan make for an erotic, sinister couple, and watching this "family" develop is one of the few gems of the bully/mom genre, right along with the "Conflicted" series. A few spelling and grammar gripes aside (semi-colons are NOT commas!), I think how everything's been composed so far has been well done. Every chapter was more intense and perverse than the last, and I look forward to how depraved these characters continue to get.

Now if you'll excuse me, I need to go take a cold shower and then watch something funny.

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Post by mathew elizabeth on Tue Jun 20, 2017 7:15 pm

Thankyou so much for your praise of my story Yfi. Sorry about the late reply. Thankyou for your comments about my grammar mistake. Ill try to keep that in mind and correct those mistakes in my compilation re-release.

I'm thrilled my story has this kind of effect on people. I realise it must be frustrating for people who have followed my story from the start. I know I have taken my time with the chapters. But I still don't even know myself when exactly the story will end. I'm thinking maybe I'm halfway done; but I'm not 100% sure.

What's been great about this story is that I've kind of forced myself to go slow with it and take my time. It's great to see that the last 15 chapters have come together in a sort of chaotic but cohesive whole for you Yfi. I hope this is the case for all my readers.

Ill try to have chapter 16 out within a month. Hopefully before 'Game of Thrones' comes back on, hehe!

Thanks again! Smile

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Post by Betrayal on Thu Jul 13, 2017 1:09 pm

Mat your asstr link is down Shocked
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Post by mathew elizabeth on Fri Jul 14, 2017 10:16 pm

Thanks 'Betrayal'. I know...I'm pretty bummed about it. I went and checked to see if I could still log-on. Turns out I can still access my archived stories as an author, but it can not be shown to the public for some reason. There has been mass deletions of ASSTR profiles recently. I seem to be one of many effected. Chapter 15 is not lost though. I still have it saved on my computer. So the best way at the moment to read my stories in there edited age-appropriate form, is on sexstories.com. Ill post an edited chapter 15 on that site sometime. Chapter 16 will be delayed a bit. I don't think ill get more than 3 more chapters out this year. Thanks for the heads up 'Betrayal'. I'm glad fans like yourself are still eager to read my story and see what happens next. Sorry for the inconvenience.

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